When did people put chairs in closets and how big is it? It’s creepy how you can imagine this, but – don’t take this the wrong way – I like this perverted stuff, even if it makes my insides feel all wrong.
Ahhh!!! Scary, but well written. A quick note— in the first paragraph, I feel like “apparent” is awkward. Maybe “obvious” would be better? Anyway, nice work.
Yikes, ech, and brutal. Effective writing, just a gnarly situation. My one nit-pick would be the number of hands, as it seemed like he tightened his grip on the back of her head, covered her mouth, and undid his pants.
I really liked the switch in perspective to explain the outside people ‘giving them their privacy’, allowing it to go on. Nice touch.
1) Congrats on getting featured. 2) This is like my first comment in about two months on Ficly, so feel honored. 3) I’ve noticed you have a knack for writing really powerful lines of imagery that you drop into important moments. It’s a good knack to have.
I also enjoyed this story, but I’m confused over the word love. Surely, if he loved her, he wouldn’t rape her and ruin their chances of getting back together? I think “love” is too profound to be used this way. Aside from that, and your use of imagery was really great and I also liked the idea of 7 minutes in hell. Tell Nobody was an excellent touch, but I don’t think it fits with I Never Stopped Loving You.
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