Wow, intense and sad. Seems like someone has been listening to Metallica’s One

Very tragic and sad. Nice job getting inside the head of the person in this situation, would be ‘Locked In Syndrome’.

I shed a tear, truly. This is so beautifully sad. The idea of being just half a human, when there are some people who don’t deserve to be a whole one.

Nice work- as usual. You took it upon yourself to create a protagonist that most people don’t even truly see- and for that I applaud you. It is sad, and you did a fine job portraying that. Dialogue is clear and thoughts are clear too. My only minor complaint is in the phrase ‘built in straight-jacket’ which is descriptive and it sounds like something someone might say but for some reason it sticks out a little bit.

You did a great job of bringing this guys sad thoughts to life. This reminded me of a short story called, I Have No Mouth, but I Must Scream, I cant remember who its its by though…

You did a great job of bringing this guys sad thoughts to life. This reminded me of a short story called, I Have No Mouth, but I Must Scream, I cant remember who its its by though…