This is more of a stream of conscious piece than a proper story. I had to get it out of my head, sorry if it doesn’t make much sense.

It resonates and uses similar language with a number of previous stories you’ve written.

I appreciated the ending – if the leaving had been coming obviously for months or more it’d be dealt with in a different way. But to be blindsided with such an emotional blow is tragic.

Perhaps there is regret in an “I should have seen this coming” way? Sometimes, a person in love won’t see the signs that there is a lack of connection on the other’s part.

Three pencils for the story, five for the ending – four overall.

Good job.