the change is confusing, at the end it is okay, but in the middle my brain gave up trying. also you said his bed twice and clearly there is a distinction between the two brian’s, but you repeat yourself so much that you make them identical. which is beyond confusing. you can’t relate to one being trapped and one being freed. this is textbook, watch and see the two transform, there is no emotion for the reader. it leaves questions, which one is the good brian?

Thank you for your comment.

I agree that it is confusing. I was channeling Brian’s confusion while writing it.

Your last question actually enforces my intention. Which is the “good Brian”? Which indeed…

My intent was to blend the two Brians until the reader couldn’t know which Brian was the real one and which the parasite. Brian himself lost the ability to know.
I p0ndered if there even was a difference between the two and asked the reader to do the same.

Who am I? Am I looking into the mirror or looking out from the mirror?

I’m too tired to remember the chain-of-consciousness thread that I was following at the time but I remember it making sense back then.
I wanted to break down the reality barrier between Brian and Brian until neither we nor Brian knew who was real.