I’m not sure if I did the right thing by chopping this to pieces in order to fit it onto a ficly. Maybe this would work better in two parts. The first could introduce Jedediah and his greedy ways. The second could reintroduce our hell born cowboy.

And, yeah. Maybe I’ll redo this.

Love the descriptions. It reminds me strongly of old-style fairy tales, only some of the elements are so creative! The red-hot horse shoes in particular were a really nifty idea.

Honestly I think you did great. It’s not particularly complex, nor is it a subtle masterpiece, but it’s a great story (maybe even a piece of one) because it’s just rock solid. You’ve created a protagonist with personality, an antagonist who is genuinely interesting, and a conflict that could go any number of ways.

Good job!

Redone or left, I got it, loved it, and nearly swooned at the visuals. My only critique/style point would be the name choice. If I followed correctly, the guy on the horse is the slain cowboy from the last two bits, whom I named Jebediah. His first victim in his new Hell-born role is named Jedediah, which might lead to some confusion on the part of the lazy reader. Just a thought, if you’re redoing anyway.

Haha, I didn’t even notice you naming the guy. I’ll switch it up.