Nice little twist that I unfortunately saw coming a mile away due to my experiences with paintball. Grotesquely colored bodies just screamed paint to me.

Well done. I’m a paintball fan so 5 pencils.

I liked that it ended “yellow” instead of “red” and I was quite engaged even when I thought I might “look away” at the ending. I think that says a lot.

Oh, wow. The fact that this can throw a twist at me without expecting it- and I should, seeing as mine has a twist. You earned your 5 pencils.

Descriptive, colorful and (dare I say it) explosive, with a twist ending. One shot-one killer story.

This story was a ferocious competitor. In the end, it won by the sheer weight of excellence, both in presentation and ending.

Great entry and deserving of top kudos!