Neat ending, not at all what I was expecting. Good job on all the senses too. I didn’t notice it was for a challenge until after I read it, so you managed to fit them all in without it feeling forced or awkward.

I absolutely love your wording in this; snaking, scorching, invoked, poke in the head, the trees rustling in a breeze that didn’t reach you. It all adds to the moment. Also, there is no ‘telling’ here, only showing. Two critiques, 1. spelling: passed me, not past me, streaming not streming.. and 2.grammar/style: the sentence with the sarcastic ‘when thoughts of his graced my mind" is awkward, and you shouldn’t have grace in this story at all! :P