Lust, envy and vanity all seemingly portrayed as one sin. The transition is seamless! One thing, you need to get the tenses sorted, especially in the first line. You switch from past to present. I love the story though. Clearly a very strange and isolated man.
Looks like you fixed the tenses, or I didn’t notice the switches. Great portrait of the sort of miserable slob we associate with why the seven deadly sins are so bad. I caught mention of six of the seven, the only one I couldn’t put a finger on being illustrated was averice. Still, awesome job getting that many into a seamless portrayal of a very unpleasant character. And hourly? Really? That could cause some damage or something.
Yeah, that was the only one I had trouble working into it. I tried to hint at it with the stacks of porn, but it just didn’t fit as well as the others. I did fix the tenses. And thank you for picking up on the ones that are exactly front and center!
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