That’s wonderful!

A really clean, original example of giving us a throwaway piece of information – four consultants failed to complete – and then making it crucial to the overall story.

You should be very proud of this, it’s a lovely piece of craftsmanship that works well as a one-shot, or as a tantalising opener! Bravo! MH :)

Thanks MH! A lot of this story came together as I was editing it – the part you mentioned wasn’t even originally in there :)

Silly, should have used a drone, the old man wouldn’t be able to read the robot’s mind!

surprising speed and agility, i thought maybe it was a hologram old man walking so the real one could sneak up on the sniper. read his thoughts.. i never thought of that…and the four consultants failed, see i missed that detail, i thought the old man was the failing one.