This was a nice take on the angel/devil sitting on your shoulder using death of a salesman characters. the last two lines sent this piece over the top.

Dude. “M*e*llinium Falcon?” Come on man, you’re better than that.

I’m not familiar with the Arthur Miller play, so I might be missing some subtext here. I do however like the jostling between the two “inners” for the control of the salesman. It’s very relate-able.

Oh, you’re also missing a space in your third-to-last paragraph between “and” and “take.”

Overall, good stuff.