Very visual. I love the use of the senses to add to the overall effect. Makes it seem really real. Another sequel, please…
Could do with a little more action, although I love the description.
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Zooey is a carefree, hippie, kinda girl! is it just the sun that leads her outside, or does she have a great motive? I mean, Fritz has to go buy coffeemugs.. and finish his sculpture, and submit it to some art gallery.. But Zooey.. is she just going to work? you’d think she’d shower first though.. :P
And we need some action, I agree!