There is some really beautiful description in here – you use the senses very well to create an all-encompassing image – it felt like I was there!

The only thing I was unsure of was ‘the sun filtered down like a caress’ – I’m not sure if the imagery was quite right, but other than that – a superb piece of scene-setting – MH :)

Lol! I think I’ve been cutting too much off that sentence. It’s difficult to get used to the character limit (the original story is more like 2000 words long, and there was a leopard, although I never spotted it).

were you in a desert at first and found a rainforest? that seems like a beautiful place and you were careful not to disturb the nature. :) the only thing this piece is lacking is a touch of sentimentality, but the character limit and the scene probably swallow up the reverence you had intended to convey more sharply. :)

We were in a dusty savannah and found a spring. There was a waterfall downstream which led to a valley that was indeed a rainforest. :)

I hope I can get back to Flicly soon, but I have to do some project work first.