Cute, if cliche. I like that the action is implied. This is a good thing- keep doing it. You fit two very distinct emotions in there without making the transition too jarring. Usually these ultra-short stories don’t have that much content.
Cute, if cliche.
I like that the action is implied. This is a good thing- keep doing it.
You fit two very distinct emotions in there without making the transition too jarring. Usually these ultra-short stories don’t have that much content.
(: Thanks! I thought the transition wasn’t very clear – it seemed pretty vague who was who, and the only way I could explain that he’d forgotten the ring was through the title. LOOPHOLE!
(: Thanks!
I thought the transition wasn’t very clear – it seemed pretty vague who was who, and the only way I could explain that he’d forgotten the ring was through the title. LOOPHOLE!
J.M.V. 
Nickel