haha, very mundane and yet interesting in an everyday life sort of way. Good work. I don’t really feel like rating tonight. In closing: If you need a rating on this I’ll oblige.

Fancy taking it out on the poor crunchy nuts. Not nice I say.

The diction in the dialogue is very inconsistent. For example, “…failed to go down to the Giant…”; “failed” is very formal while “go down to the Giant” is very casual and colloquial. While it isn’t incorrect, normal people don’t talk like that. There’s a similar inconsistency with the narrator, who acts very young but has a somewhat formal monologue. a consistency in tone is very important, especially in dialogue, monologue, and narration.

On a larger scale, the story as a whole falls flat. I get what you’re going for, but the whole “endearing” angle doesn’t work unless your audience cares (at least a little) about the character. As it stands, it’s about some brat sleeping too late and whining about not having the right kind of milk. Make the narration more consistent, more personal, and it’ll be more what you want.

Hmm… maybe this is the way they speak in my alternate world? Or do I have to make many preceding/following ficlets in order to set that scene…

@JMV, I have to point out that as young as seven I was talking formally inside my head. “I do believe it is time for tea.” Sorry, that point is irrelevent.
Still I’m sorry Banana, the story doesn’t appeal to me. but that’s a matter of taste. The Giant isn’t expanded enough and I’da thought people would buy more milk?
But generally today I’m not in a good mood and that may affect my judgement.
Errrrr….. sigh Apologies for my long-winded, pathetic excuse for a comment. it won’t happen again.

Ha, yes. Admittedly this was one of my more completely stupid stories. I have tons of ’em.