Another oldie- I found my old bebo authors page and thought this would probably be the least cringey one to share!

been there! There are a couple words I’d change if it were me, ridden to written for one, and a comma before hoping. Too to tho’ in fourth stanza, and comma before but in the 5th. Astray to ‘to stray’ and the too in the 6th to something else, and if it were my story, i might change waited to wasted, but that’s just me!

I know how this feels, though and I like it.

Thanks, this was helpful. Especially the ‘to stray’ one, I think that works much better. I’ve tweeked most of them I think.