That was all over the place. Felt like it twisted and turned with each line. Very nicely done for such a short poem.

I thought the first two lines were so powerful they could have stood alone.

This is fantastic.

Wow.

A friend once told me that the only reason someone writes is to have it read – and though everything he does seems designed to keep his words from being communicated, they are – through a medium stronger than letters on a page.

Beautiful, in it’s tragic resignation.