Sounds like it’s already gone quite mad!

Or has he always been quite mad? It’s hard to tell with transcendent individuals. Great first entry for the challenge!

Very interesting – perhaps the no longer forgetting things leads to being quite mad, in itself? Relentless, merciless, the perfect memory.

I would like to see this become a full-fledged story. It has a refreshing hard sci-fi feel that’s becoming less popular.

I see a chance to make this ficly better by making this sentence below better…

“It did not take long for the seductive attraction of new brilliance to lure other minds into voluntary union with a greater whole.”

I got hung up here, and I suspect it’s because it needs to be two sentences, or the glue words (for, of, to, into, with) are too compressed in such a short sentence.

Not sure how to fix it exactly, but I’ve read it over and given it some thought and I hope you take this comment positively because your story is close to being great. And who writes long bumbling comments on truly awful stories? Not many— if any :)

You’re a champion! This one really brought forth the feelings of one who lives forever.