That is powerful; the dying soldier crawling to the tombstone of his love. The sadness and empathy takes the place of disdain in this piece, but to make your readers experience so many emotions at once in such a short space is phenomenal!

Very well written. I enjoyed both of these stories. A very poetic kind of melodramatic scene like you’d find in the memoirs of some self-proclaimed warrior/poet. I’m reading Cormac McCarthy lately and this flavor is very tasty to me right now.

Hey, thanks for the feedback! It’s really appreciated, people, even if I probably don’t deserve it.

I’m not sure if I managed to capture the mood of Violet Hill very well; if anyone has time, could someone help me out by checking out the song? Link below:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eBeAP8EZ9Lc&feature=avmsc2

Thanks a bunch! You guys are awesome. I love your stories. Heh heh.

I thought you captured the feel of Violet Hill very well.

Thank you for your kind words, smdasilva. :)

This was so powerful and sad. I really felt for the love he felt, even dying. Wow. Nice, very nice.

Thank you. :D