“the pain was unbearable as she strip away all my freedom.” The phrase starts in the past tense, so it should read “stripped away”.
“the pain was unbearable as she strip away all my freedom.”
The phrase starts in the past tense, so it should read “stripped away”.
Ah, finally a fantasy piece. Exactly my cup of tea. I really enjoyed this. There are one or two small typos, as Ray has pointed out, but this remains a wonderfully dark and gripping piece of writting. Thank you for entering Matt :)
Ah, finally a fantasy piece. Exactly my cup of tea. I really enjoyed this. There are one or two small typos, as Ray has pointed out, but this remains a wonderfully dark and gripping piece of writting.
Thank you for entering Matt :)
Several problems with punctuation throughout this piece, but the genre is just my style. Good stuff!
Thanks for the feedback! I would appreciate it if you would check out my Limelight stories so I could get some feedback on them.
this is not the same witch and man from limelight only in the past? this would make a good backstory.