oo, they had a fight! Tense moment, well done!

Ouch. That last line changes the timbre of the whole piece. Nicely written.

Thanks for your comments and ratings. I’ve having fun at Ficly!

I felt like the last line hit it home a bit too hard, but I was totally sucked into the tension of the story, and you’ve created characters I feel I know in such a short space while developing a conflict between them. Welcome to ficly indeed!!