A good story, if a bit awkwardly broken into two parts (I read part two first, not realizing it was part two)

I think the bags could be clarified to make the man’s facial expressions or bodily movements mean something. Obviously this is a metaphoric piece, but the events taking place are muddled in the mind’s eye. All I know is, before he dies, he gets rid of his burdens.

Haha, yeah I definitely have to work on this piece. I want to try and somehow make it just one story. Thanks though guys! :o)