Dude, all joking aside, that’s actually really good.

I mean, you almost had it. Maybe shift some of the wording, clarify ‘thinly wet’ and ‘life will still sip’.

The 4 pencil rating is the most frustrating for me. Fewer pencils tells me I just missed the mark, but 4 is so tantalizingly close…

But really, the pencils don’t matter as much to me. I’m just happy writing, and reading what my fellow Ficlyists share. :)

Did I find my five, bluefish? I did my ‘edit best’. Though I like the four stars, scuse me, four pencils— it’s fitting.

xD I like this series of poems. Make me smile and brighten the really bright day :P

This was really rather good and an interesting read. However, I feel that ‘yet’ and ‘inlet’ felt a bit forced.

Joking aside, I actually typoed every word in that comment, and oddly, am stll typoing in this footnote.

The comments are the best part of this game. XD

This was a good attempt, but I’m not a fan of the genre so ‘4 pencils’