Thank you for the feedback. The last paragraph changes because it goes from the young bird telling his own personal story… to that of a narration of the mother coming home and her offspring being gone. I can see how that could be a bit confusing. Let me rethink it. Thank you.
Broke my heart… I was so excited for the little guy, but I ached for his mom, who probably would have liked to push him from the nest. Lovely, short tale. The change in POV is great – but maybe just write the entire last paragraph from the mom’s POV or break out that one last line into it’s own… really great!
Krulltar
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Nancy
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