A damn hard one to write. Apologies for the excessively long paragraphs, but I was experimenting to achieve a particular effect. Not sure how well it turned out.

I absolutly love this line “My revenge only from saving those though lost”

I think the overall tone worked well, and the present tense worked too. I liked the message at the end and that general feeling of urgency and almost desperation. The wording in the last paragraph got a little cumbersome at times, a bit hard to follow.

For what it’s worth, I don’t think the paragraphs are excessively long at all. This is, as usual, well-written.

Initial words were:

“Vengeance for a Crime”, “demolished” and “colony”

Thanks to the above people for commenting!