I like this one. It gives me all sorts of ideas.

I liked this story overall and would like to know more about this tormented character.

I noticed you used the word “they” a lot and found it a bit distracting.

A fugitive who leaves an unintentional swath of death and destruction in his wake. Quite the burden to bear!

I agree with the other comments. It’s a well-written story that hints at a lot within the character limit, and it fits the challenge well.