romeo kills juliette this time, and then himself.. :P but alas, was hell just a metaphor for the disaster, or is he dead already and just living out his worst nightmare?

I applaud the effort, but it feels to me like you were trying to do something stylistically that didn’t work. If you are inclined to revise this, I would recommend simplifying the language to make the events clearer.

Not sure I followed the ending. It definitely has that olde school melodrama feel to it, which kind of works but seems like it was kind of hard to maintain throughout.