Chilling, and disgusting, and really quite impressive. I likey:)

eerily gruesome…I guess his mommy didn’t teach him not to play with his food. Anywho, since I had skipped breakfast, this story made me hungry :-9

One misspelling prised should be pried.

Actually ‘prised’ is a word, meaning “forced open by levering” or “extracted or obtained with difficulty”
So, yeah, HA! :P

What I did do, in hindsight, is add an extra ‘as’ so that is amended.

Wonderfully gruesome!

The only element missing for me was some indication of why her body is lifeless. Was she drugged? Hypnotized? Is she actually dead, but somehow still aware?

Still, it’s a nice, nasty story.