Several things: 1) Your first sentence should be changed to something like “I have noticed” or “I have observed.” If the MC has been watching all that time, it’s not really considered something that has begun. 2) Having ‘the’ in front of ‘human nature’ is awkward phrasing, though I understand why it’s there and what you’re trying to do with it. The whole sentence should probably be rewritten to make it sound more natural. 3) Last full sentence, ‘personal view’ is awkward phrasing once again. I’d change to something like ‘personal observation’ or ‘personal study’ to make it flow a little easier. 4) Your use of the word ‘persona’ is, I think, incorrect. ‘Human nature’ implies a group where ‘persona’ implies an individual. I can sort of see what you’re trying to do here with it, but I think can be better phrased.
That said, this is a fascinating piece to me, and I’m curious about Auriel’s background and motives. A bit of a rewrite and reworking would greatly the overall effect. :)
Jim Stitzel