I like what you were trying to do, but unfortunately you’re only telling us he’s the greatest poet rather than showing us somehow that he’s the greatest poet. I don’t know how you’d do that in this format, but if you could it would have a much greater impact in my opinion.

I agree. I tried to do that in my first draft and it got awkward within the word limit. Still trying to figure that out.

Really like this.

I think this could work if you fleshed it out just a tiny bit more, like if you showed us his rain-soaked notebook of poetry or crumpled papers in his uniform pockets and a stubby pencil sharpened on rocks.

Just needs a little something more, but good job!

It’s a big idea, but it’s definitely a little too much concept. Why is it so important that this poet died? Even if he was the bestest ever, what made his life more important than the men who died with him?

In the first version I told the story of the other men there. However I had to do it in two sentences and really disliked it. I think that this idea might not fit with the word limit. Ah well. Thanks guys.

Well, everybody knows how much I love World War I, so I really enjoyed this (even if that wasn’t your intended backdrop). I think other people have pointed out the only real problem – I think the idea is too big for the word count. The last sentence feels a little abrupt, but the rest is great.