edited a little, please tell me what else needs to be fixed here if I get only 3 pencils :)

Hahaha! I loved it, and I loved the grandma. Just my type of person.

see the way you are doing these you are not restrained or even challenged by the character limit, these aren’t even chapters. it would be different if you were collaborating with another writer but writing alone you should be challenging yourself more.

Ach, Joe. Climb down from the high-horse. It’s fun to squeeze a story into 1k some days. It’s also fun to write a longer story. One of the beauties of ficly is that you can branch someone else’s story at any point.

In the meantime, I am enjoying this story and I like the way the installments are falling.