timing IS everything.. :)

I do love tales like this. :-)

This was rather slow taking off for me. But the last two paragraphs were great and @ElshaHawk put it best

Ooh, I’m intrigued. Like southsideof10 said, it was a little slow towards the beginning, but it picked up right away. Love the last few sentences. Thanks for entering!

Startling and neat ending. A gradual build-up pays a handsome reward.

Love it! Flow and pace were perfect.

Creative concept.