jesteram

For the first few lines, I thought, “Okay, another generic fantasy.” But the creature—how it looks, how it talks—proved me wrong.

I’m into showing-not-telling, so the lines “angry and bewildered” and “fearful” seemed unnecessary to me. We can guess her emotions from her reactions.

Also, there’s something typo-ish in the fourth line. I’m not sure how it’s supposed to read.

But I do like the creature, and the menace of its words.

• Posted over 10 years ago.