This sounds like the intro to something very interesting. Good first ficly to read in a very long time!

Wow, this is really intriguing… I want to read on! Nice work; I especially like the first paragraph. Thanks for entering!

Engaging!

nice hook at the end! i want to know how that ruined his marriage and family.

Chilling! I like how it moves into the specific with a good build up to the big reveal.

There’s got to be more to the story. The big reveal is clearly just the beginning. Seems this story would be great to continue with a few sequels.

Wow. You are on fire lately, for me anyway. The is another great story and I agree that it is only the beginning. Kudos to you!

This, as usual, is awesome in every way. I love the first paragraph (making it almost impossible to enter anything new to the challenge by the way :P) and it really opens up the whole story to possibilities.

This is a great opening. I hope it keeps going…Amazing what you can do with one little ficly…I’m imagining what you could do with this whole series =D
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Congrats! You are the winner of the Secrets challenge! I felt that your entry had all the intrigue and potential of an interesting series based on a secret. Nice work!