So very cool. I enjoyed this very much. :)

Ha ha ha ha. So awesome! This was fantastic! Thank you for not doing the standard abab rhyme scheme.

I enjoyed the ending very much. Personally, though, I would revise the first stanza. It’s definitely the weakest—the rhythm’s cut short, and the rhymes seem a little forced. Other than that, I like.

woa top notch man i wish i culd write poetry like this totally caught me off guard

I loved this, though I confess that the end was weaker than I would have liked. It seemed to me she was playing the town for a fool, and let them stew and stew till she told them her secret was nothing…that’s what I was hoping for. In any case, it’s quite well done.

Haha, love it! It has the feel of a child’s nursery rhyme… and then it takes a dark twist. I didn’t see that coming; nice work, and thanks for entering!

nicely done! rhyme, story, twist, just superb!

Thanks, everyone, for the feedback. It’s nice to know what direction I should steer my writing and where I could improve.