That was gruesome! I like how you left him alive at the end, keeps us guessing what will happen to him if he survives.

Oh sorry, also, in the last sentence you have written: “leaving the grinning demon with the bloody grin behind him.” It doesn’t seem right with the repetition in there. Just my opinion, though. ^^

Ah, yup. I try to check for that sort of repetition. That one got past me. Thanks for pointing it out. :)

Wow. That opening was weirdly…. erotic, but then it just got darn creepy and dark.

Yet another great addition to you ever increasing pile of scary shit :p

That comment causes me to giggle – evilly and madly. I love mixing sexy and creepy; it’s just so rarely that I get to do it. :)

ew ew ew ew! that is just painfully gross and twisted. I bet she is fast, I bet she grows wings. I bet she chases him down. Afterall, he knows what she is.

I think she probably does enjoy the hunt. :)