I don’t know if you have the characters left, but you might want a comma after “didn’t” in the third-to-last line.

Otherwise I think it’s good, it has a subtle humor but it could also be completely serious.

Why is this chapter 13? The story doesn’t make any sense, you do a poor job of “developing” Graff. Just comes across as really sloppy and disjointed.

This guy’s a hack.

The black bic lighter is portrayed in crystal clarity. Five stars! erm.. pencils!