Some really neat stuff here and some great images. Overall the tone works really, well but some of the grammar stuff winds up really distracting (last sentence of first paragraphs, exclamation marks in second to last paragraph, other fragments). In some places they work, but other seem over done or just placed or executed oddly.

Again, some really strong images and emotions, just some of the execution didn’t quite hit the mark for me.

Thanks for the feedback. An amalgam of snapshots of the times her, her and her came back. Dream like fragments and discomfort, in punctuation and in brush strokes.

Interesting clips of their life together. I can see the scene through your words.