Whoa, creepy. But in a very good way. I love the repitition in the middle, it gives the piece a sort of poetic feel. Thanks for entering!

Oh the sadness. I feel the sorrow, the burden. Great work.

(TFB-01-3 points) – Well written with voice of a resigned and saddened god. I like it a little bit more because clearly this was not “all part of the plan”, freewill threw a wrench into it which makes freewill a little more “free”. As far as constructive criticism goes, I’d probably alter either of the Adam/Eve statements to give them more individuality. Still good stuff. Cheers!