Oh great story.
Romantic and sad. I love the ‘beautiful lie’ line.
I think a little more about their back story would be nice. Maybe a prequel?

The description here is really gorgeous in some places, and I agree with JC that the ‘story’ is very sad…

I did find the dialogue to be a little grating – sickly sweet to the point where it didn’t seem believable. I can see how that might work with the idea of the ‘falseness’ of the relationship, but it just didn’t work for me.

Also, I’m sure I’ve said it before, but the lay-out and structure makes the good writing difficult to read.

Still, the vast majority of the content was handled magically – MH :)