Commentary: I don’t normally include profanity in my stories, but this story seemed to require it.

Very cool. I like the shift from ‘oh crap, I’m screwed’ to ’that’s it, you mothers are going down.’ Fun stuff and feels internally consistent and therefore real.

Love it. In fact, I love the entire series.

The girl just took a level in badass.

I like this. For some weird reason this reminds me of Alice from the Resident Evil movies. So much so that the actress is the one I picture for the protag.

The harsh level needed to happen sometime or the stakes would not feel high enough for her to take defensive Rambo measures.

The harsh level needed to happen sometime or the stakes would not feel high enough for her to take defensive Rambo measures.