Ouch…nice.

wowzers…I need to compress and come back.. that was intense and exquisite! Excellent, excellent. Thank you.

uhh, DEcompress that is. I liked this the second time around. There’s so so so much packed in here but that doesn’t get in the way…the details amplify the story/ scene rather than drown it in white noise…err, if you will. Great job.

Very intense, I love how you dropped the reader right into the middle of it without any warning or explanation.