This is really evocative of all the sour, face-scrunchingly lemony experiences it concerns…

Word choices were good, and the cobra comparison was particularly clever – when you can actually picture imagery, rather than it being an abstract concept, you know it’s worked!

Good, tangy work – MH :)

wow.. its you best yet! :D

Thanks to both of you for the feedback :)

I love the tea throw-in that you incorporated—the lemon is both a pain and a pleasure. Beautiful

Nice imagery. Really good piece.