I know, I know, I said GURPS, but GURPS doesn’t have a concrete pantheon I could reference, so DnD it is (3.5 of course).

WITH one important exception… NOBODY plays a wizard. Sorcerer’s where it’s at!

Ha! Fantastic. Currently in an Exalted campaign myself. ^^d Hmmm… Maybe I should put my character’s backstory on here…

Thanks for the Setup!

It’s always really satisfying when people use the structures that ficly offer to their advantage, and to the advantage of some innovative storytelling…

Although, strangely, I find second person to be the least immersive form of writing, this did a fair job of setting a scene around the reader – obviously important in this kind of piece!

Interesting work – consider me intrigued! MH :)

Ah, okay the DnD does explain the second person narration, like you’re the dungeon master laying out a scenario for a game…or whatever you call it. My big complaint would be the switch from past tense in the first paragraph to present tense in the last two paragraphs.

I can understand that, but I don’t get that myself. In the first paragraph he has explained what led up to the current situation, and then proceeds to build from there. I didn’t think this would cause any problems when I wrote it, so I’d be interested if it bothers anybody else.