I think what you have here is the groundwork for a character – an interesting character – enigmatic, wrapped up in her own thoughts, to the point of isolation from the world…
But the plot is slim. It doesn’t really move anywhere – and although pace is something really difficult to achieve in the constraints Ficly enforces, I think it could do with clearer development, and a direction…
With edits, you could make a reasonable first piece – and the first thing I’d recommend you do is get rid of those protracted ellipses in the last line, as well as the plea for people to contribute!
Make your writing interesting and evocative, with plenty of opportunity for continuation is the goal for Ficleteers – and that’s when sequels and prequels will stream in… MH :)
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