Hmm… I’d be interested in how this continues…

I love how it ends in the middle of the command. It adds to the suspense. I’m interested in who the person listening to the message is and what their history is….this definitely screams sequel. :)

Very intense and a neat idea, the classic message from the future or perhaps a precog since it isn’t explicitly stated it’s from self. You missed a few apostrophes of all things, such as on ’father’s safe’ and ‘they won’t show mercy’.

A chilling tale of soon-to-be.

I liked it and would also like to see the flash (1000 word) version.