Having read the whole series – it’s epic in scale, but needs an injection of pace, and character…
This latest entry seems to certainly pick up pace, and could it also be introducing a new character?
Not a lot to it, and I think you mean ‘they’ instead of ‘the’ in the fifth line, but considering you’re coming back to this after several months, I’ll be interested to look out for where this goes… MH :)
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