This story is so good, each piece adding a layer to the picture. I couldn’t help myself…

awesome!

Any ideas for a better title?

I felt the comfort, the intimacy of her encounter with this young man. Which is why I wonder about this line…“It was strange how comfortable she felt with him, as she had known him for years.” <<< mainly because on first glance it comes across contradictory (she knew him for years and she feels comfortable with him so how does ‘strange’ fit in…why is she skeptical?) but then I thought, "well, she might not have ever felt comfortable with him before and that is why it is strange that she does now… so, if that’s the case then disregard my previous statements…and if that’s the case then her previous relationship with him needs to be explored and explained for the reader to get the picture…and that is coming I know… you led us into that nicely. Beyond all of my rambling I really enjoyed this, PJ. Truly wonderful ;) as usual!

Title Musings: Insight Seer ; Ruby Blue ; Ruby’s Mystery Azure Mr. (haha) ; Azure Monsieur and the Red Hidden Heart; Red Hidden heart; Hidden Heart; Ruby Heart

Ruby’s Hidden heart
Azure Eyes And The Hidden Heart

@Tad Yes I missed out an ‘if’ :S And you had such a conversation with yourself about it. And I’m taking one of your titles

oh, as if she had known him for years…now I get it! Lovely that you to took one of my titles :) thanks.

This really rocks. I mean major rockitude.

Oh wow your profile picture is creepy…

Yay, congrats on the feature!

Great piece. The tone is amazing. Heavy, dark, and mysterious.

Brother or lover? mmmmm Could go anywhere.