Love it! Just a fabulous story. It always amazes me how much emotion can be put into 1,024 characters. :-)

I like this story far more than you will ever know. Content-wise, it is full of imagination and emotion. On the constructive criticism side, the three sentences that begin with ‘She’ stand out because they are so close together. I might start the third sentence with ‘Twenty-five now, …’ but as it stands I like your story a lot. Good job! Cheers!

You’re absolutely right Robert, I had a huge struggle trying to cram everything I wanted into this piece and the “She” sentences were a hold over from an earlier version. I shall fix!

Lovely and I think a perfect example of the genre, complete with being a little on the dramatic side.

Thank you very much guys, I had like four ideas for this piece, and ended up only being able to include like two of them. :D

You really do pack a lot in here – fae, romance, drama, poetic turns of phrase – I like the italicised sentences, they bookend the piece really nicely…

Reads like it’s straight from the Brothers Grimm – complete with that ending tinged with a little sadness and mystery.

Good work – MH :)

A great story, and all packed into a short ficly. It really paints the picture of an epic story altogether, good job!

I can’t add much to the people who came before. I echo MH’s hint that this may not end so well for our protagonist.