Of course, we recognise the crazy, paranoid character warning of impending doom from all kinds of TV programmes and films, but you invigorate Frank with a real human spirit that makes him more realistic than most.

First line of the second paragraph you mean ‘watch’ rather than ‘watched’, but other than that, both grammatically, and in relation to content – this is solid work – MH :)

Fixed! Thank you!

Very good portrait of crazy paranoia with just enough sense and reason behind it to make it really scary. I thought the rationale for the self injury was a nice touch.

The first paragraph sets up the tone of the piece so nicely. It was creepy all the way through, very much liked this.

I think I could do with a watch like that!
The first few lines really hook the reader, I like it alot.

great description! wonder why pain works…

This is very good! If you think too hard sometimes, it’s easy to be paranoid! I would be interested in knowing more.

Nice overall rhythm and very creative!