The first two lines are my favorite. I like that the piece is a serious look at an internal conflict, but I think it would be stronger without so much rhyming; it distracts me from going deeper into the poem.
The first two lines are my favorite.
I like that the piece is a serious look at an internal conflict, but I think it would be stronger without so much rhyming; it distracts me from going deeper into the poem.
Awesome rhythm and emotional magnitude… anyone would find it hard not to feel this one.
Wow…just, wow. And i agree with Jesse Blake, those two first lines got you off to a great start.